Sunday, 3 July 2016

The Rough Ride

The Rough Ride
I grip the handles with my sweaty hands as I shiver with fear. I think to myself, “Is she an expert?” I look at the bike instructor as she is taking the final bikes out of the old and rusty shed.

We are finally in the forest then suddenly I hear a ‘’stop!’’  We have reached a steep hill and I mean steep. The instructor tells us to go down one by one!. I watch as the other people pedal anxiously down the hill, someone walks down the hill. They are tingling with fear while they think of what might have happened if they had ridden their bike.

Down the hill, over the roots, I finally catch up with the group.   Damien yells at me “ Where have you been? We have been waiting for you!”
“Sorry I fell off at some roots,” I reply in exhaustion.
“What happened?” Damien replies anxiously.
“Here's what happened,” I say.

The soil was soggy, slowly turning into mud, as the instructor said to us “Be careful!” On my bike I was speeding through the mud, zooming through the puddles thinking to myself “My mum isn't going to be happy when I get home.” As I accelerated through the forest “Oh no!” My tire was stuck in the mud. Time slowed down. I was just waiting for my body to slam into the ground. It hasn't happened I think I'm ok “BANG!” Nope definitely not ok. It was like a horse had kicked me in the chest or John Cena had RKO'd me.
  

“Wow looks like you had a rough ride Lochie,” Damien says.
“Let's start to head back shall we?”
“What's the time?” I said
“5:00 why?” He says
“Oh no! We're going to miss dinner hurry up let's go!” I reply.


Finally we're here in time to have a thick juicy burger.
Mmmm thick juicy burger.
By Lochie

Reflection
This term I was learning to stay in present tense. For example if you say “he did” - that's past tense and  “he is” - present tense. I am also learning to use my bright sparks ideas instead of just trying to make up ideas in my head.

2 comments:

  1. I like this piece because it has burger in it

    Finally we're here in time to have a thick juicy burger.
    Mmmm thick juicy burger.
    By Lochie

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  2. A very good description of what happened I loved the words you used I grip the handles with my sweaty hands as I shiver with fear. I think to myself, “Is she an expert?” I look at the bike instructor as she is taking the final bikes out of the old and rusty shed.and mountain biking was my favourite actively at camp.

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